Friendster post [11-3-06 at 7:40 pm]

I wrote this for APC over a year ago. I have not the chance to improve this poem. All the advice I got from fellow APCers, I have already forgotten. Perhaps I should dig up their old comments and use them for butchering this poem further.

If you're an amateur writer, there is never a finished poem. A poem goes through many processes before you can finally put it to rest and try your luck at having it published in your local paper or magazine. A Violet Dream is already edited but I won't post it yet. Not now. On my birthday maybe.

Hehehehe....

This poem was written because Kuya Neil made a writing prompt to use the theory of existentialism in poetry. I never understood what he said but I just wrote this stuff. Hahaha!

Saffron Serenity (edited again today before posting at 2:17pm)
by Rudolph C. Anongos Jr.

I am desperate
to hesitate
the voices that dictate
the decisions I make

I'll tell them to stop
with any luck I'll succeed
in persuading them
to shut their mouths up

They contain me,
hold back my jaws,
clip short my claws.
Sympathy’s never a reward.

They never did care
if crooked teachings
and preachings of theirs
led me astray. Period.

I really am a fool
Used and re-used over
And over again
Perhaps I always will.

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[Added thoughts before posting. 2:21pm]

As I read the above post that I wrote over a year ago, I realized that the principle of editing and polishing poems does not only apply to amateur writers but to everyone else as well. Kuya Neil does have much influence on my views on this because he was the one who introduced the concept to me in the first place but with constant practice, I have found this concept quite true.

Because we are not Frost or Browning, I think it is only appropriate to look back at one's poems and assess if improvements should be made.

The Violet Dream

This was written way back when I was still in third year high school. It has undergone a lot of revisions, Kuya Neil's advices do work with poetry most, if not all, of the time, that so much of the stuff you'll be reading is a lot different from the original one, obviously. Haha!

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The Violet Dream
by Rudolph C. Anongos Jr.


Lengthy words cannot express
When I'm lost the doubts possessed
Of thinking of submission
To my gloomy thoughts alone
You are the silver lining
I've so longed to get hold of

Your deep-set violet eyes
Pierce far down beyond my own
Hush now my dearest one
I will thaw your wintry nights

Inside my warmest embrace
Bitter memories may fade
And with your gentle repression
My pools of disquietude
Dry up, succumb to your lips

Overwhelmed by sadness
Simply because of my fear
Of letting go while here
Afloat on a waveless sea

Our inhibitions subside
Heartbeats quicken such as that
Time spares an ephemeral shift
To give way throughout the night

Feel my warmth and hold my hand
Feel my lips press yours softly
Your nightmares are chocolate stains
Washed away by suppressed tears

Hush now. Hush. Be calm, be still.
Feel my lips press yours softly
Utter not words of disbelief
Harbor not, feelings of guilt
Instead, close your eyes
I'll cover us with quilts
And beside you I will sleep
To nowhere will I go
For you are my violet dream
Dreams come true for all I know

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